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"The Blight Cometh"
"Is it moving?"
Bill's voice pulled Steve out of his thoughts. The fungal, oozing thing most definitely looked like it had moved. Or had it, thought Steve. He eyed it warily, not getting too close.
"Did you hear me?" Bill asked. "Is it moving?"
Steve continued staring as he replied, "No. It's not moving." He hurriedly grabbed his camera and started snapping photos.
Steve lowered the camera from his face, and slowly turned towards his brother. "It's growing," he replied quietly.
Bill could only stand dumbstruck as Steve continued taking pictures.
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Nice one. I'd get moving, I think.
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ReplyDeleteMaybe Steve will get more worried when it gets to be a major blob. Nice interaction and dialog between your characters.
Ron
Run boys run!
ReplyDeleteBill and Steve best run, huh? Nice ominous feeling developed without getting to specific about the threat. I liked Steve's obvious fascination, too. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteBrian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/08/03/the-lifeblood-of-the-paiik-tree/)
Engaging dialog. I enjoyed the details, like it's not moving but it is growing. Growing could be worse than moving. Also like your website background.
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I think I'm with the other commenters here - stop taking photos and run!
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I guess photographers are always the first to go!
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Some guys just don't listen. Run, fool!
ReplyDeleteHere's mine: www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/08/wild-life.html
I love the pace of this story, the dialogue is great, and yes - I would be running.
ReplyDeleteMaybe he has the telephoto lens on? At least he's not using his phone. There's still a chance they'll make it out unslimed and alive. Why do we assume a fast-growing slimy thing is deadly? You play on some innate fear without ever saying openly that this is a threat. Interesting how effective it seems to be.
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